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Post by vendeta on Feb 10, 2007 13:36:54 GMT -5
Yes Parel, makean example post please!
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Post by Bond on Feb 11, 2007 0:39:44 GMT -5
-Nodes- go ahead Parel, and ill make comments on it if needed, though im sure your post will be flawlessly made.
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Parel
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Fragile Lives S h a t t e r e d Dreams
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Post by Parel on Feb 12, 2007 22:29:37 GMT -5
I will repost one of my favorite posts due to lack of Muse lol some things will be highlighted and so.
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Parel
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Fragile Lives S h a t t e r e d Dreams
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Post by Parel on Feb 12, 2007 22:35:47 GMT -5
[Notice that these are thoughts and not actions this is part of my Role Play style, all rights reserved to me please]
Innocence is for the weak. Pity is for the stupid. So this fem did not charish it when i was given to her. There was no point in good or sharing or lightness. What is the benefit to you? all you get is a 'thank you' and most of your stuff taken from you. Pity, haha there was no pity in her black heart none at all, and then theres innocence... she used to hold this, but that was a used to. Nolonger would she show innocence aroud others, maybe not even to Circo.
[Notice thoughts contine, varying in spots here] Carboin was released in a 'whoosh' tassels fallen on her facade moved and granted optics vision. Grey, everything was grey and no color but black white and grey was the world to her. It used to be in hues of red and blue and yellow but now everything was grey. Skeletal structure would stand out from her pelt. Thin, scrawny, starved. There was no thought in her hunger though, not much prey roamed along this terre. Muscle replaced were fat and flesh was supposed to be, and it shifted as the ess moved quietly into the pack territory. Shoulder blades weaved to hell and heaven, stilts carring her well built carcass. Boa was lowered to the sniw covered topography. It wasnt even snow anymore, it was ice. Cold hard ice that you could never play with, ice that didnt thaw with rays of the sun. The old blazer was above in heaven, shining stray white rays in scattered spots. Black clouds blocked it from vision,, it was going to hail tonight as it did yesterday and the day before. The falled ice merged together forming th frozen sod. Facade was fixed in a malevolent stare. Obsidians were scraping against the ice, a large 'screaming' sound. Harks were pinned down, muffling the annoying screech and creating a barrier from plugging. Plumage was tucked neatly under her white flage, as it always was. though she never gave in to submision, it was always low and tucked. Queer, she was queer. Wierd she was wierd but it never really hurt her what others said about her. Nostrils inhauled the cold air, it chilled her already bitter bodice and rattled into her damaged lungs. The air retraced itself out into the atmos again, coming this time in a smoke-like form, white from what little warmth it recived within her organs.
notice the style of words and how they fit together. I have, in the post, highlighted each sence of the body. there is also a massive amount of Role Play vocabulary through out it.
[Note: at the end the fem goes into thinking here, the first sentance perfactly fusing wth the sentance used in the very top, this first is repeated as the last, but that is my style my format you must make your own] There was no life here, no life to create no life to build no life to maintain. Here innocence was for the weak and pity for the stupid.
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Post by FGHFGH on Jun 6, 2007 17:54:24 GMT -5
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Post by HJKHJ on Jul 14, 2007 21:54:28 GMT -5
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